Is this a good COLLEGE ESSAY? I sent it to all the UCschools..?

It's a bit disorganized I would say. I don't think "I danced with my crush to Michael Bublé’s “Can’t Help Falling in Love” at Winter Formal, I lose my voice each August at the Van’s Warped Tour, I luckily ped my driver’s license test on my first try" is suitable for a college essay.